untitled villanelle (20170622)

32 thoughts on “untitled villanelle (20170622)”

1. Being broken – do we mend if left alone.

   1. Sometimes you just have to bust out the glue

2. Reblogged this on O LADO ESCURO DA LUA.

   1. Thanks 🙏

3. Good job with the villanelle!

   1. Thanks. I’m not very comfortable with the form. But I couldn’t pass up the opportunity to throw one down.

      1. Yeah–I’m not sure if I have the time. Maybe I’ll do a late one. 😉

      2. Better late than never, right? What really helped me was Frank’s template in the post. That and going to rhymezone.

      3. Yeah–I just have to finish writing an article first. 😉

4. Great poem. This form is very appealing, thanks for the introduction.

   1. Thanks very much! I like the form, but it’s hard to make it sound natural.

5. I can see a theme of indifference or perhaps defiance in the last two lines where agreement is not required and there’s nothing here to see. The details suggest to me that the person may be dying and the others are trying to do something to help or heal but it might be too late. It might also be depression in which case a healing might be worth trying. Nice villanelle.

   1. Thank you. The depression is definitely a theme here. I used your model from the prompt and it was very helpful.

6. Masterful. I love this line especially “i’m no clock to wind with a secret key” and I love the moment when the chandelier falls.

   1. Thank you. I’m glad you could find something that resonated with you.

7. The ultimate decadence. Love it!

   1. Thank you. I wasn’t too happy with it when i finished, but it’s growing on me.

      1. I like it. Especially the chandelier.

      2. That word was dictated to me by angels. Well, an open tab at rhymezone. It caught my eye and I knew I had to work it in.

      3. It’s a word with a lot of baggage. Fitted perfectly with the seedy faded glory imagery.

8. Love the imagery here! The description of the badly hung chandelier speaks volumes. There is a feel in your words that I think connects well with artists every ilk. One of the things I love about the form is that it stretches me to uses words, because of the rhyme scheme, that I might not otherwise have included. At first it feels limiting but ends up being freeing. Bravo!

   1. Thank you so much for your generous words. I’m glad you enjoyed it.

9. …but I do agree! A poem worth reading again, and ruminating upon. Something to… um, crow about.

   1. Thanks very much!

10. …”and I don’t care if you agree” … great line. Well drawn villanelle.

    1. Thanks very much. I’m glad you stopped by.

11. I love this. It’s brilliant!

    1. Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 😃

12. It’s very vivid and forceful. I think you wrote it well.

    1. Thanks very much!

13. There is a feel in your words that I think connects well with artists every ilk. It’s a word with a lot of baggage.

    1. Thank you.

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