contained (20160815)

Posted on August 15, 2016August 15, 2016 by crow

i keep my heart
sealed tight in a jar
so you can’t hear its beating
i put a blanket
over the glass at night
since it makes noise
while i sleep
i whisper a soft lullaby
the words your name
repeated like a heartbeat

——

for
dVerse ~ Poets Pub
Quadrille: Jar

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34 thoughts on “contained (20160815)”

merrildsmith August 16, 20162:30 am

I pictured a lab from one of those old black and white sci-fi movies (or Young Frankenstein) at first–but then those last three lines are so beautiful.
1. Crow August 16, 20165:04 am
  
  Thank you. 😀
Laura Bloomsbury August 16, 20164:15 am

particularly like the blanket over the cage imagining of your heart in a jar
1. Crow August 16, 20165:04 am
  
  Thanks!
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) August 16, 20166:51 am

We do need to protect them even if they keep us awake…

Have you not tried to link up using Mr Linky? There you will find the other entries.
1. Crow August 16, 20166:56 am
  
  I haven’t tried that. Is it on the Dverse site?
2. Crow August 16, 20166:57 am
  
  Ah. I found it. I’ll add my link.
  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg) August 16, 20167:12 am
    
    🙂 great to have you on board.
whimsygizmo August 16, 20169:21 am

I like your use of the lowercase “i” here, a feeling of insignificance, of feeling like less. Trying to muffle even one’s own sound.
1. Crow August 16, 201611:07 am
  
  Thanks! I don’t usually capitalize anything in my poetry. Puts all the words on an even footing.
kanzensakura August 16, 201610:42 am

Great poem, the lullaby being the name repeated.
1. Crow August 16, 201611:07 am
  
  Thanks very much for reading and leaving a comment!
Mish August 16, 20161:30 pm

A lullaby sung to the rhythm of your own heart, or so it seems.
Lovely quadrille. Thanks for joining in at dVerse. 🙂
1. Crow August 16, 20161:31 pm
  
  Thanks for having me.
  1. Mish August 16, 20161:32 pm
    
    You are welcome anytime!
mother wintermoon August 16, 20162:00 pm

Very touching. Loved the imagery. I want to let your captured heart out of the jar . 🙂
1. Crow August 16, 20162:46 pm
  
  It might go on a rampage.
  1. mother wintermoon August 16, 20162:57 pm
    
    😀 could be fun!
  2. mother wintermoon August 16, 20162:57 pm
    
    Love crows btw.
  3. Crow August 16, 20164:33 pm
    
    Excellent!
Arcadia Maria August 16, 20162:29 pm

I love every line in this poem.
1. Crow August 16, 20162:47 pm
  
  Wow, thank you! Thanks for coming by.
Grace August 16, 20164:29 pm

I love the metaphor of the heart in a sealed jar, and whispering of the name like a heartbeat.

Nice meeting you and welcome to D’verse!
1. Crow August 16, 20164:34 pm
  
  Thank you and thank you.
Truedessa August 16, 20164:40 pm

Maybe, it is better to let the heart be heard, why contain the musical beat..
Bodhirose August 17, 201612:25 pm

I like the idea of singing a lullaby made up of a name in rhythm to a heartbeat. But I feel for that heart kept in a jar…
1. Crow August 17, 201612:45 pm
  
  It’s built to endure 😀
  1. Bodhirose August 17, 20166:25 pm
    
    I get it… 🙂
Rosemary Nissen-Wade August 18, 20162:21 am

I love this endearing fantasy.
1. Crow August 18, 20165:03 am
  
  Thank you!
daa1915 August 24, 201611:19 am

Lovely and poignant. I liked this!
1. Crow August 24, 201611:20 am
  
  Thank you so much!
sheldonk2014 September 4, 201610:02 am

Love this heart in a jar
A life w/o the human entanglement
Simply beautiful
Sheldon
1. Crow September 4, 201611:31 am
  
  Ah if only it were as easy as storing an organ in a mason jar, eh?