you like a string
the song of a
single pure note
it is the ringing in my ear
love is tinnitus
there when you’re trying to fall asleep
when you wake up
both the roar of the ocean
and the dentist’s whining drill
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“love is tinnitus” – fantastic! The pluck and resonance of that note at the beginning sustains nicely throughout.
Thank you. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Though probably best not to read it to your SO. Might get slapped.
Qbit picked the line I focused on. The definitive statement in the poem. Harshly romantic.
No sense in sugar coating it.
None at all.
Excellent imagery! I really felt like i had a squirming experience reading this one and I loved that about it
Uncomfortable squirming is good 😊
I thought so too. nice writing!!! keep them coming. thank you
I like the pain of being stretched tau(gh)t. Your maddening poem sounds like it could’ve been written by Clive Barker! Wicked.
How stretchy are you? Like taffy?
You can’t stretch taffy taut! Hmm. I’ll illustrate it for you someday… then you can put it on that canvas. Win-win!
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