the escape of air (20161121)

33 thoughts on “the escape of air (20161121)”

1. My goodness! This is so raw and palpable, I could feel each verse and visualize every image! Kudos!

   1. Thanks so much!

2. Love the connection between the heart and air here…like a bloodstream almost.

   1. Thank you 😊.

3. I love this response specially the ending three lines ~

   1. Thank you! I’m glad it spoke to you.

4. I liked the last three lines questioning if we are the trapped heart or the escaping oxygen.

   1. Thank you!

5. A visceral shock that explodes like a punch.

   1. Thank you. I was going for that punch in the gut feeling.

6. bravo! this is a wonderful rendition of the prompts – that last stanza speaks volumes in so few words

   1. Thanks very much’

7. p.s. sorry left the wrong blog link above – try this one

8. Nice! I love the raw punch of this.

   1. Thank you very much.

9. Visceral and raw.

   1. Thank you very much!

10. It is a terrible feeling you describe like when life has knocked the breath out of you and you feel you’ll never breathe again

    1. Yes, exactly. Or even if you want to.

11. Wow! This really takes your breath away! (Sorry, couldn’t help the pun, but it did figuratively do that.) 🙂 Wonderful take on the prompt.

    1. 😀. Pun approved. And thank you!

12. Powerful, open and intense. I especially like the questioning at the end….I feel the inner struggle.

    1. Thanks!

13. Hmm – I was thinking smoke and the need for air and where there is smoke there is fire..Maybe, I am off base, but that is what I saw.

    1. My poems are just seeds. But you’re responsible for what comes out of the soil. 😀

14. These 44 words pack a punch. Well done.

    1. Thank you so much for stopping by and reading!

15. Whoa! I am left breathless, Chuckie. Bravo!!

    1. Thank you! I will just assume that wasn’t just a pun 🙂

       1. Of course not! Although the word is most apt. Speaking of words, your haiku poems are very challenging. I’m actually having fun and will send you our collaboration by this weekend. Fun!! 😊

       2. Thank you. I wasn’t sure they were very good, but I’m glad you’re getting a workout.

16. Wow! Startling, disturbing, and wonderfully written.

    1. Thank you very much!

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