trilune (20160810)

Posted on August 10, 2016 by crow

looking in your eyes i can measure
how much distance has grown between us
you took such care in planting the seeds

you split my bones with all your regrets
wiped me from your shoe like something foul
driven mad like apocalypse steeds

and now–i’m dust, some blood, little else
mere memory of a summer breeze
shadow moon your tide no longer heeds

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Poet Rummager August 10, 20169:41 pm

Who would do that to you?! Smh. On the other hand, this is a cool poem with a lot of dark imagery!
1. Crow August 10, 20169:47 pm
  
  Thank you. I work best in dark, I think.
  1. Poet Rummager August 10, 20169:50 pm
    
    But before 11-ish?
  2. Crow August 10, 20169:51 pm
    
    🙄
  3. Poet Rummager August 10, 20169:54 pm
    
    😝
Jane Dougherty August 10, 201611:31 pm

That might have been hard, but it was worth it. As you say, dark works best.
1. Crow August 11, 20165:05 am
  
  Thank you. I wasn’t too sure about it, but I love trying new forms out.
  1. Jane Dougherty August 11, 20165:17 am
    
    Nine syllables is a hard one to fit into beats. I liked the way yours turned out.
Pleasant Street August 11, 20167:47 pm

Bravo
1. Crow August 11, 20168:05 pm
  
  Thank you!
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deuxiemepeau August 16, 201612:37 pm

This is fantastic- meet memory of a summer breeze- love it!!
1. deuxiemepeau August 16, 201612:37 pm
  
  Meer memory! Oops!
2. Crow August 16, 201612:52 pm
  
  Thank you so much.

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