chariot (20160802)

these words are slow horses
pulling a chariot
with broken wheels

an abundance of syllables
roll against my teeth
yet little remains
to drive the pen
across paper

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Poet Rummager August 3, 201612:56 am

You need a whip.
1. Crow August 3, 20165:09 am
  
  How do you know I don’t have one?
  1. Poet Rummager August 4, 201612:48 am
    
    Lol. Silly me!
Bill Bisgood August 3, 20162:08 am

Very good, has a certain potency
1. Crow August 3, 20165:11 am
  
  Thank you!
  1. Bill Bisgood August 3, 20167:23 am
    
    Just realised I’m not sure what I mean by that. Damn good poem 😄
  2. Crow August 3, 20167:27 am
    
    I got that you liked it 😀
Jennifer G. Knoblock August 3, 20166:32 am

Love those two concrete images–the broken wheels and the teeth.
1. Crow August 3, 20166:51 am
  
  Thank you!
grimbeau August 3, 20167:46 am

ditto – well sung
1. Crow August 3, 20167:52 am
  
  I thank you.
merrildsmith August 5, 201612:20 pm

I really like the images here–words as slow horses and syllables rolling against your teeth.
1. Crow August 5, 201612:20 pm
  
  Thank you!

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