Poem 20160225

the too-warm tea cools
two tabled cups forgotten
lovers’ tight embrace

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Published by crow

I'm a writer and a dabbler. I live in Washington. View all posts by crow

jazzytower February 26, 20167:33 am

Ah!! I like where this ended up:)
1. crow February 26, 20167:49 am
  
  Thanks!
Elusive Trope February 26, 20161:40 pm

splendid – the ending of second line with “forgotten”, consciously “tabled” – then in a twist, for something more important than tea.
1. crow February 26, 20161:59 pm
  
  Thank you!
onecarriage February 27, 201612:21 pm

Lovely surpise and narrative. I have heard it said that short, haiku like poems should not be narrative; I am glad you reject that constriction. Beautiful poem.
1. crow February 27, 201612:46 pm
  
  Thanks. As far as I’m concerned, as long at the haiku distills a single moment it’s doing its job.

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